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2014版考研1号英语《写作160篇》第一本考研英语话题写作书 全面涵盖当年可考话题，连续8年命中写作原题 2014版《写作 160 篇》经典必背10 篇应用文读者习作点评 第一节 申请信 沛雪 2011 年 11 月 16 日 写作原文 Dear Sir or Madam, I am a senior student from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature of Nanjing University. I would like to apply for admission to your university. In reply of the opportunity you provide from your web page, I am very interested in it, and also think it would be of great benefit to my future （破折号—）in your university, I will become more creative and enthusiastic. Here are some reasons that I think I am a perfect candidate. On the(去掉the) one hand, throughout the 4 years of study, I have attained a fair knowledge, my resume which enclosed with this letter reflecting in. （这句话写的对吗？我有点叫不准。。） On the other hand, I am good at communication, and like to cooperate with others. I would be very grateful if you would consider my application (and send me application forms). I should be pleased to attend for an interview at your convenience, when I could give you further details concerning myself. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 原作点评 第一段：做简要的自我介绍，告知对方自己写此信的原因。但需保持文章整体结构的均 衡，突出第二段的主体地位。 第二段：介绍自己的特点与自身的特长，说明自己是很好的候选人。但相关介绍太少， 说服力不足。一般在文章最后一段才说“随信附有自己的简历”。故此处可表述为：On one hand, I have attained an immense amount of knowledge throughout the 4 years of study. 第三段：再次表达自己的愿望，即希望申请能得到对方的考虑，并期待对方的回复。 总体点评 文章亮点：①结构完整：三段式写作框架，符合写作要求，各个段落的基本功能突出。 ②表达清晰：句型结构基本准确，句意清晰，文章内容传达比较精准。 文章错误：英文应用文的格式有两种：缩进式，每段段首空 3-4 个字符，称呼语位于左上角， 签名位于右下角；齐头式，称呼语、正文、署名均居左，段落之间空一行，署名 左对齐，之间不空行。 修改意见：词汇和句式的使用比较单一，建议在使用本书过程中，从经典必备中积累并掌握 好词好句的用法，并用在自己的习作中。 参考分数（满分 10 分）：7 分 第二节 慰问信 汪敏 2011 年 8 月 19 日 写作原文 Dear Bob, ①I was very sorry to hear that you were badl